kristen999: (Teyla)
kristen999 ([personal profile] kristen999) wrote2010-08-05 06:38 pm
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Fic "Breaking the Stone"

Title: “Breaking the Stone” (1/1)
Author: Kristen999
Rating: R
Genre: Futurefic, Angst
Character/Pairing: Team, John/Teyla,
Words: 2500
Summary: In these moments, time spins away and all of Teyla's carefully bottled-up thoughts escape out tiny cracks.

Notes: Just playing in another part of the sandbox. Hope people will give it a shot. Happy birthday [livejournal.com profile] tielan

Big thank you to [livejournal.com profile] wildcat88for the quick beta and to [livejournal.com profile] sgafan for her suggestions.





Her world shimmers in shades of obsidian, the sky the same as the blackness beneath her dusty boots, tiny flakes of silver the only bit of color sprinkling the ground. Teyla breathes heavily, tasting plastic and rubber from her oxygen mask. It's too big for her face and air seeps out of the tiny gaps, but she presses on; the atmosphere is thin, but not deadly, the extra oxygen giving needed stamina. Lifting up the hammer, she slams the mallet onto the bits of rock, smashing them into smaller pieces.

Several fingers pop out of the holey tips of her worn gloves, but the leather softens the shock of the vibration. She grunts, hefting the tool up to repeat the action again and again and again. It's back-breaking work, eight or nine hours of repetitive motion and burning muscles. She hums sometimes, imagines herself anywhere else but this horrible place. A shard of rock ricochets, smacking her on the cheek, and she rubs away the pain and blood with the back of her hand.

The echoing of a cart over the hard bumpy ground signals Rodney's arrival and Teyla leans on her sledgehammer, taking a five minute beak until he arrives. Her eyes roam over the barren black slate, watching John chisel away at the edge of the quarry.

They're lucky and have an advantage over the others who scavenge here. John uses black powder and fertilized soil from M1X-626 soaked in chemicals to blow apart the ore. Once he's done smashing the rock into chunks, she'll follow him, crushing them into more manageable pieces to be transported away.

There's a muffled string of complaints as Rodney arrives and pulls away his mask. “The left wheel came off again and we...we need to replace the axle.”

Forcing the mask back over his mouth and nose, Teyla uses a calm tone that tends to settle his nerves. Her hand strays to a bicep of lean muscle; gone is the softness of a few years ago. “I am sure Ronon would be glad to have something to fix when we get back to the bunker.”

“Yeah, he's been such a big pain in the ass since he broke his hip.”

Teyla misses Ronon out here in the darkness. But he needs time to recover from his fall and they have to gather the precious silver mineral held hostage by this hard, unrelenting rock. It will buy food and water and help them pay for the raw materials required to keep the jumper halfway operational.

“I will help you load this.”

“No!” Rodney grabs her shoulder with a powerful grip. “I'll do it.”

It's amazing how much he's changed in the last couple of years. A gang of thieves had tried to rob them a few months ago. There were a dozen or more, and Rodney broke a man's nose and nearly killed another with a chaotic swing of a wrench.

He'd asked to be included in all training and sparring exercises after, impressing them all with his hand-to-hand skills.

Teyla's knees ache without mercy and she sinks down to sit, watching Rodney scoop up the rubble with a shovel into the rusted cart. They have another month here to mine what they can for trade and will travel the rest of the year from planet to planet, never stopping too long.

“Fire in the hole!” John shouts.

Teyla and Rodney cover their ears as the ground rumbles and a shower of debris spits into the air.

Her ears ring and Rodney's already complaining about how John's going to blow himself up if he's not careful. She doesn't actually hear the words behind his mask, but Rodney is predictable in his tirades.

They both anxiously watch and wait until the gray dust cloud dissipates and John waves at them that he's fine. Rodney's shoveling again and she really doesn't want to get back up, wishing to sprawl onto the ground and stare up at the stars. Nighttime will shift to dawn and the sky will become scattered shades of dark violet from its dying red sun, the only reason this whole place isn't frozen over.

Groaning, she forces herself to her sore feet, brushing away the dirt from her brown coveralls. Taking the sledgehammer, she heads toward the next clump of rock and begins another round of hard labor. Her strikes clash loudly with Rodney's shoveling, metal and rocks clanking together, causing her head to pound.

It seems like forever, but Rodney finishes, bitching when it takes a few tries to get the heavy load moving. “See you at dinner,” he rasps, before giving the cart a good shove to send it rolling.

Teyla's too fatigued to respond, her breaths nosy rales, fingers aching from gripping the handle too hard. Only one more cartful and they'll be done.

Until tomorrow.




Walking the long trail back is exhausting; her sore arms can barely carry the iron sledgehammer. Her pace is purposely slow to avoid overtiring, allowing John to keep up as he follows a few meters behind. The gravity here is stronger than any of them are used to and it takes extra effort to lift up her boots. John lags further behind, but she will not slow down for him to catch up, knowing that such an action would be worse than a knife to the back.

Their home of the last month is a leftover bunker from a previous mining colony. There are dozens scattered across the narrow valley, and most are occupied by groups seeking ways to feed their hungry mouths. None of the others have explosives to break apart the ore which cuts the time in half to gather the precious Illite mineral. It's the reason they mine at night, to avoid contact and territorial feuds.

Ronon waits outside the opening, blaster in hand, forced to sit in a motorized wheelchair Rodney cobbled together from spare parts and a broken seat. Teyla leans down pressing her forehead to his, cupping the sides of his head with both hands. “We are well.”

Ronon squeezes her shoulders, his forehead lingering on hers for a beat longer before lifting it up. “Dinner's gonna be late. Had to scare off some scavengers.”

Raiders roam the quarries for supplies and they are always drawn toward a bunker that might conceal needed supplies. Rodney calls this planet a wasteland of petrified rock. Those who lived here before had blasted the hillside into smooth walls and ceilings leading inside the mountain. Oil lanterns hang from wires, orange and yellow streams of light illuminating the steep opening.

Teyla pulls away the rubber band holding the rest of her hair back, allowing the strands to fall about her face. “Did they offer much trouble?”

Ronon snorts. “Not after I burned off their eyebrows.”

People see a man forced to reside inside a chair of scrap parts and sense an easy mark, not knowing how outmatched they are. “And the jumper?”

“Secured.”

The cloak drains power; it doesn't impede flight, but it's enough to keep them from leaching it for other needs. Ronon waits for John before lowering the two-inch thick door with an elaborate pulley system.

“Whenever you're done screwing around, I could really use a hand repairing the axle. Unless you're too busy playing gatekeeper,” Rodney's voice echoes from inside.

Ronon rolls his eyes, but the ends of his mouth curve mischievously. “Maybe if you fixed the motor on my chair, you could hook it up to the cart and I could drive it back and forth.”

“Are you kidding me? Those Borg wannabes have a stranglehold on everything high-tech, low-tech or anything above rocks and twigs. I created a lead acid battery within a cell that actually doesn't explode when you try gunning it! It's a work of genius and....and what do you mean fix it? There's nothing wrong with it!”

John leans against the wall, shaking his head. “Do you have to wind him up every night?”

“Yep.” Rotating the right handle joystick, Ronon's chair jerks one hundred-eighty degrees and stops-starts toward the back of the bunker.

Teyla stores the miserable sledgehammer inside a trunk with the rest of their tools. Gathering the last of her strength, she heads toward the bath, yanking down the straps of his soiled coveralls. She half-falls onto a seat of rock by the entrance, untying her laces and removing her heavy boots. The gloves come off next, and her t-shirt, shorts and socks become a useless pile by her feet.

“I'll take care of the hotbox,” John calls out as he peels away his black undershirt.

He's removed his boots, but not his boxers, and he limps heavily toward the fireplace, bending down with a grunt to ignite the kindling with a lighter. Teyla slides up behind him, taking his waist when his knees refuse to straighten and his left leg buckles.

It'll take a few minutes for the temperature to rise high enough to heat up the stones. Taking part of his weight, they hobble together toward one of the long stone benches. No words are exchanged, the silence filled by popping wood as the stones slowly roast under the fire. Leaning her head back against the wall, she mentally thanks Rodney for designing this bath house for them to unwind after a long day of mining.

She doesn't want to move, let alone get up, but her bones ache and her back is a gnarl of tension. Letting out a groan, she goes toward the barrel of water, scooping a large amount with a giant ladle, dumping the contents over the sizzling stones. Five ladles later, the room fills with balmy steam, mixing with her sweaty skin.

Beads of perspiration run between her shoulder blades, the moist heat crawling across her body. John's placed a towel on the polished stone bench and Teyla sits, bending forward, elbows on her knees, forehead resting on her crossed wrists. Eyes squeezed shut, she stretches wrung-out muscles and loses herself in a slight burn down her spine, reaching for the floor with her fingertips to stretch even further.


In these moments, time spins away and all her carefully bottled-up thoughts escape out tiny cracks. The years on the run after the great seize of Pegasus, hiding in pits and caves, dodging those hunting them and fighting back in ambushes and raids. But times like this, when she's doesn't think she can split another rock or sew another stitch of a new article of clothing--she imagines Torren. No longer a toddler now, talking and laughing and safe. Safe and alive while she fights with her team to bring them all back home. To drive away the race who came from another dimension, wiping away most of the Wraith, and forcing those who survived from Atlantis underground.

But they have not gone quietly.

And it's this single determination, this relentless drive that energizes her blood day after day.

Thumbs dig into the triangle of knotted muscle in her shoulders, fingers kneading above her clavicle. Lips press lightly across the nape of her neck and nibble her left earlobe. Teyla leans against John's chest, enjoying the skin to skin contact. His strong arms encircle her and Teyla clasps his biceps, squeezing them with urgency.

He starts to get up, but Teyla twists away, breaking apart his embrace. She needs to soak in those hazel depths as she climbs onto his lap and takes his mouth with hers. He wraps his arms around her waist, locking their bodies into place. She rocks her hips to increase his growing arousal, running her fingers through his messy hair, capturing his mouth again in desperation.

His hands run up and down her slick wet back, cupping her hips.

“Teyla,” he breathes when she releases their lips.

“I agree. We need more steam,” she smiles

He growls as she disentangles herself, rushing toward the barrel of river water and dumping countless scoops onto the stones. A burst of vapor condenses on her cheeks as relaxed muscles uncoil from their earlier tension and are recharged with adrenaline. The bath fills with a heavy mist and she reaches for John through the thick cloud.

He meets her lips with tongue and teeth, hands brushing her arms, shoulders, and both sides of her face. It's a high of endorphins, of physical contact and emotional desire to be touched and desired. Teyla shoves John hard, his back smacking stone as she yanks down his boxers.

“It should be the other way around,” he says, spinning them into opposite positions.

Teyla allows the reversal, giving him control, knowing she can take over whenever she wants. Her hand runs the length of his thigh, tracing the jagged scar that goes from his pelvis down to his left knee. Sometimes massaging it is an act of comfort, other times stimulation, the nerves there overly sensitive depending on the want or need.

Tonight perhaps it is a bit of both.

She tantalizes and teases him and he reciprocates, pressing her against the wall, hiking up her thighs, taking her fully. One of her hands digs into John's shoulder for balance while the other encourages his hips forward.

They share it all. Steam, sweat, breath. Electricity maps out every nerve, overriding her senses until the room spins and her legs turn to rubber. Dizzy and flushed, Teyla pants for air, John leaning heavily into her.

“I'm too old for sex in a shower,” he groans.

“Steam bath,” Teyla corrects teasingly.

They slide down onto the floor in a mass of sweaty limbs. Teyla rides the lingering rush, rolling over to her side, resting her head on John's shoulder and reaches down to gently massage away the pain in his bad leg.

“Um, thanks, I’m good.”

Teyla brushes away John's damp sticky hair from his forehead, gazing at the fine lines accenting his eyes, tracing the tiny scar under his jawline, pressing her fingernail to his lips. “We should get up.”

“We should take a nap.”

“You just don't want to make the bed.”

“Maybe,” he mumbles, eyes fluttering close.

Teyla doesn't want to carry that awful sledgehammer to the quarry, spending hours breaking rocks. She wants to lie here, pliantly nestled against John, listening to his heart beat, soaking up the warmth of his body.

“Hey!” Rodney yells from outside the entrance. “Other people would like to relax! Not that I won’t have to spend an hour disinfecting it after your shenanigans. Who needs the Playboy channel when all I have to do is listen to you two?”

“We'll be out in a second,” Teyla calls out.

“I suggest you make it soon before Ronon eats your part of dinner. Guy breaks a hip and now all he does is eat.”

“Keep talking, McKay, and you can hunt your own food with a bow and arrow,” Ronon bellows.

John's smiles, carding his fingers through Teyla's hair. “Guess you're right. Better get moving.”

Teyla's thoughts drift to the grueling dirty work waiting for her, waiting for them all, knowing that their fight will continue no matter what. Standing, she takes John's hand, helping him up, his tags clanking together, and they squeeze each other's fingers.

It doesn't matter how long it takes to win back what was lost. Her child and people are secretly safe. She has Ronon and Rodney by her side and John in every way that matters. Their plans will become reality one day and they will rebuild once again.

[identity profile] ann-tara.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 12:21 am (UTC)(link)
Damn, I haven't updated my icons lately, and I no longer have my John/Teyla one. But now I feel the need to make a new one.

This is really terrific - I feel sore and tired just reading it, so I know the language and descriptions are working on me. :)

And, boy, this is what I would have always loved to have seen between John and Teyla. *swoon* Plus, the whole thing is such a terrific post-finale story that is loads better than the finale we got. Brava! :D

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 03:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I wanted to paint a picture of this bleak existence, punctuated by some hope. I'm glad this worked. :D

[identity profile] tridget.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 12:57 am (UTC)(link)
Okay, I'll bring my pail and shovel and try this part of the sandbox today.

This was awesome. It was heartbreaking, and hopeful, and hot, and tender all at the same time. Absolutely believable. You managed to create a complete world in relatively few words. I adored your vision of who the characters had become over time and circumstance which stayed very true to who they were.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I wanted to capture a single snapshot that somehow would convey this new world the team found themselves in and I felt that John and Teyla could grow much closer under these circumstances.

[identity profile] d_odyssey.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 02:20 am (UTC)(link)
Wow, awesome job of packing so much in this story. Great job of setting up the planet and the hardships the team faces. Miserable place. I love how they've adapted, particularly Rodney changing his attitude, working at night and Ronon guarding the homestead in his chair. Very hot scene with John and Teyla. Enjoyed the connection, how they know each other so well including the playfulness and sensuality. Wonderful story, stark world but the team still retains their bond and humor. Excellent.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. In essence this IS a team story, as they've adjusted to this new harsh life, but still together, fighting and living. Glad you enjoyed the steam bath scene :D

[identity profile] creidh.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 02:21 am (UTC)(link)
Wow. That was heartbreaking and vivid. Very real. I really like it. :)
Edited 2010-08-06 02:22 (UTC)

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

[identity profile] tex.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 03:46 am (UTC)(link)
I love the imagery in this. You really conveyed Teyla and John's weariness well.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. It was a nice change of pace from my usual fare.

[identity profile] coolbreeze1.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 04:08 am (UTC)(link)
After I talked to you I meant to come right over here and read this, then got distracted by those twitter pics...

I really, really loved this. The imagery in this was so strong; it allowed you to build an entirely new Pegasus galaxy in just a few lines. I got what had happened, what the team had been driven to, who and what they were fighting to restore. Their entire lives had changed and yet they were still a team - maybe even more of a team than ever. Loved John and Teyla's relationship here too. It just felt natural and normal and part of their every day lives in this changed Pegasus.

*Claps!* Great job! You built a beautifully detailed sandcastle on your first trip to this part of the sandbox!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. As I was saying to above, this is very much a team story, stronger, closer and trying to overcome a set of greater odds. Cutting away Atlantis and setting it in the future gave me such new freedom...will stash this verse aside for a longer story...'one day' :-P

[identity profile] sgafan.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 04:28 am (UTC)(link)
I love this. I know I might be repeating myself to you, but I love the fresh different writing style and you just ROCK in your imagery. It was such a different world for the team than what we're used to but they were still the team we love.

Great story, and great job in Teyla's POV. It was my pleasure to offer a few little comments during the process. :)

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you and thanks for those helpful suggestions. I felt this sense of freedom writing this in the future with Atlantis gone and everything that was 'normal' wiped out. It was fun to play with.

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[identity profile] tzzzz.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 05:04 am (UTC)(link)
Cool. I really like the world you created here.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. :D

[identity profile] linzi5.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 09:06 am (UTC)(link)
You know I'm not a shipper, so this isn't usually the sort of story I'd ever read, but as you wrote it, I wanted to have a look. Though I'm not a fan of John/Teyla or John and any main cast member, I did really like this, well, for me, quite sad story - though there is underlying hope there, I can see. The descriptions were wonderful, and I feel weary and sore just reading this! You yet again create a desolate and harsh way of life so incredibly well. I did like the comfort John and Teyla obviously give each other, and I found your writing to be very sensual yet tastefully done. Ronon's as grumpy as he would be being injured, and Rodney's his snarky usual self. It's nice to read a story from Teyla's pov, so often she's ignored. So, though I'll always be wary about reading anything with romantic pairings in it, I did really like this because you wrote it so very beautifully. Well done. It's good to diversify when the results are as good as this :)

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I wanted to write something new to keep me on my toes. This was at its essence, a team story, and I wanted to write something tender and mature between members of the team. Thank you for giving it a shot, it was nice for the muse to swim around elsewhere.
juniperphoenix: Teyla and John sharing an amused look after she's beaten him at bantos (SGA: John & Teyla)

[personal profile] juniperphoenix 2010-08-06 12:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, what an original situation and setting! Your descriptions of the landscape and of the team's backbreaking labor and weariness are very vivid.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. It was a bleak story, but with a bit of hope.

[identity profile] wildcat88.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 01:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Great job on this. Loved all the little details - the holes in the gloves, the cobbled together wheelchair, the scars from an unknown injury, the one comfort in such a desolate place. The info on what happened in the galaxy was just right. Nicely done!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:38 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you for your suggestions! I love writing imagery and I'm glad you enjoyed it! I can write short fics! Yay!
tielan: (SGA - johnteyla)

BIRTHDAY FIC!

[personal profile] tielan 2010-08-06 01:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh wow. This is awesome - and not just because it's birthday fic!

I love the brutality of it - the raw harshness of the way you've depicted the life they live, the questions you didn't answer until most of the way through the story, the dynamic between all the team and not just John and Teyla, and the sex. Hot hot hot! :D

Thank you so much - this is wonderful and I love it!

Re: BIRTHDAY FIC!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Heee! Cool! I'm glad you liked it. I had this image in my head, the post Atlantis setting and that steam bath and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
rhianona: (John and Teyla)

[personal profile] rhianona 2010-08-06 04:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Gorgeous. I love how you set the scene, showing us just what has happened without a long explanation. And when Teyla tells us what did happen, it makes perfect sense. Lovely use of words to convey the scene and their inner strength at withstanding everything and anything and willing to stand and fight, even if that means hiding until they can act.

Also, love the team interaction in this.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! Once I had the image of the team in this bleak future i sort of wrote itself. I really enjoyed writing the team in this :D

[identity profile] gaffsie.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 05:46 pm (UTC)(link)
This was fabulous! I'm glad they have those moments together to balance out the hard work and sacrifices of the rest of their days. Really liked the team in this too.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. No matter how tough their lives, I wanted to show they still had each other.

[identity profile] x-erikah-x.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 06:34 pm (UTC)(link)
I'll just be repeating what everyone else said, but this was beautiful.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!!! Glad you gave it a shot.

[identity profile] wedjatqi.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 08:41 pm (UTC)(link)
Brilliant. Atmospheric, gritty, and realistic. Great fic, thanks for sharing!!!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!! :D

[identity profile] amenirdis.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 09:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Lovely! You are so good! And this is just great!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

[identity profile] sherry57.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 09:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Beautifully written story. It goes from a feeling of harsh conditions to a feeling of family, team, togetherness and hope. I loved the sensuality of the scene with Teyla and John. Suitably hot together in the bath house!
I, like a lot of others, wish the series could have had more romance for Sheppard and the possibilities with Teyla could and should have been exploited. However, this is flogging the old horse of what could have and should have been - so thanks to you for showing this relationship beautifully.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:49 pm (UTC)(link)
I'll never understand why John never had any real romance on the show. It wouldn't have taken away any of the angsty layers of his character, it'd only make him more complex given his personality. Anyhow, I wanted this team story during the bleakest of times and to show John's and Teyla's relationship as real, but mature.

Glad you enjoyed it!

[identity profile] roo1965.livejournal.com 2010-08-06 10:28 pm (UTC)(link)
I feel tired and gritty reading this fic...and also strangely invigorated after the clean up session in the steam room! Team love in many ways. Nicely done- I'd read more of this 'verse. I lke the way you tease (literally) and figureatively with mentions of injuries and hints of what has happened and what is yet to come.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I loved writing in this verse and might return to it one day. It certainly allowed a lot of freedom to explore new things.

hard life

(Anonymous) 2010-08-06 11:50 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice. Dark, but sexy. I like the John/Teyla pairing. You did a great job melding their relationship with their circumstances and the team dynamic. -Diane

Re: hard life

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! Dark, but sexy is the type of summary I was going for.

[identity profile] michelel72.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 01:46 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, poor team! You really do an amazing job at conveying their dark, gritty reality — as well as their resilience.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. It was a dark story but a fun one to explore. Kind of anew type of team fic.

[identity profile] 2bluaeryn.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 02:51 am (UTC)(link)
Well done!

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you.

[identity profile] cazzblade.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 02:17 pm (UTC)(link)
This is brilliant! I could feel the world you'd created it was that vivid :)

Love the way you write JT and the team interactions :) Have you ever read [livejournal.com profile] azure_horizon's JT fics? She has a similar angsty way of writing JT that I think you'd like.
Edited 2010-08-07 14:18 (UTC)

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-07 04:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! This was a refreshing thing to write.

I have not read any of her stuff, will put her on the to-read-list :D

[identity profile] ninja007.livejournal.com 2010-08-08 02:31 am (UTC)(link)
Amazing. Simply wonderful.

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-09 01:49 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

[identity profile] everybetty.livejournal.com 2010-08-10 04:07 am (UTC)(link)
Can't believe you wrote this in between tag ins. Great imagery here. Love that you kept the team the same, even under such radically different and harsh circumstances. And you know I've always enjoyed the two of them together and it was cool you found a way to put them that way realisticly. Will you play further in this sandbox? Time allowing, of course ;)

[identity profile] kristen999.livejournal.com 2010-08-10 10:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks hon :D I might play in this sandbox again if the tingle is there. Had to scratch a certain itch :D

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