I came back here to read some more comments. Now I have to add, that the part I doubt most after writing something is whatever passes for an action scene. It reads like a list or a recipe to me, with no actual excitement whatsoever. It reads sort of like:
He picked up a stick. He hit the bad guy over the head with it. The bad guy said "oof" and fell to the ground.
Okay, so I made that up and it may not be quite that bad, but that's how it reads to me and is probably one reason I get so stuck at those pivotal moments in the story.
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Date: 2012-03-18 03:41 am (UTC)He picked up a stick. He hit the bad guy over the head with it. The bad guy said "oof" and fell to the ground.
Okay, so I made that up and it may not be quite that bad, but that's how it reads to me and is probably one reason I get so stuck at those pivotal moments in the story.